The debate of minimum age limit for driving is on-going from ages , wherein people have contradictory views (1). It has been argued by some people that the minimum age to learn driving should be 18 years, whilst others disagree and feel it should be 25 years. In my opinion, the lower limit to start driving should be 25 years.
To begin with, there are plenty of reasons to illustrate increasing age limit for driving is utmost essential (2). First and foremost, accidents are inevitable while driving, which can be handled at its best from experienced elders. Juvenility is the age wherein people cannot make judgemental decisions during any accidents and end up losing their precious life. A prime example is a survey conducted by Indian government using data collected over 10 years with respect to accidents encountered in the country. The result of the survey was astonishing, as the people who lost their life during accidents involve 70% of juveniles under 20 years.
On the other hand, it is always good to give opportunity for the younger generation who are keen on learning things. Even though age is a deciding factor, there are some juveniles who are capable of taking right decisions and drive carefully. If the government make 25 years as the lower limit for driving, some juveniles may feel depressed who are eager to learn driving (3). An instance illustrating this in action is the life of “George Mellor” who invented Mercedez at the age of 29 years (4). He had a great passion for a car right from the age of 10, which was nurtured by his parents, who allowed George to learn driving from very young age.
Driving is popular among people which is a mandatory skill to lead a balanced and happier life. In my view, though lower limit to kick start driving can be 18 years, I am convinced that, it is always better to make it 25 years and give extreme importance to our offspring’s life who are assets of our nation.
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- wherein people have contradicting views — ‘contradictory views’ would imply that a person has two views that contradict each other e.g. ‘Young people shouldn’t be driving because they have poor judgement’ and ‘Young people should be allowed to drive to give them more personal freedom’.
- To begin with, there are plenty of reasons to illustrate (that) increasing age limit for driving is most essential — ‘utmost’ is not an adverb and therefore shouldn’t be used with an adjective.
- If the government make 25 years the lower limit for driving, some juveniles who are eager to learn driving may feel depressed — rearranging the sentence sometimes makes it easier to follow. In this case it is better to describe what type of people may feel depressed first.
- An instance illustrating this in action is the life of “George Mellor” who invented Mercedes at the age of 29 years — spelling mistake. If you want to mention factual data such as the name of a person here, make sure you use it correctly. I couldn’t find any connection of George Mellor with Mercedes.
The essay has a defined structure and well-developed argumentation. It is easy to follow and understand. Well done!